Monday, October 24, 2011

Feedback Focus Areas On My Own Interpretive Essay On Neufeld's Comic

After the last post it was suggested that my thesis was more like a reaction to Neufeld's comic more than it was a thesis and even though that is true, I think I still did pretty good at writing an interpretive essay. There are, however, a few adjustments I need to make to the essay. To start with, I thought that about the 3rd paragraph in my essay, I talk about the colours that were used in Neufeld's comic. I think I can take those examples and tie them more with situation they were used. For example, when I talk about the colours being used to show the disgust of the convention centre, I should tie it in with the paragraph where I describe the convention centre. I believe this will help the flow of the essay to be smoother. I just hope I got the feel of the colours right.


I also need to do something about the citing that I have not put into the essay yet. I will be citing, not from Wikipedia but from the sources you can find there. I will try to take as many paraphrases as I can to coincide with with my interpretation of Neufeld's comic. I hope to do this by showing the inside perspective and his use of stereotypes and reversal, and the concepts that have come from the mass media.This is also why I have not created a works cited page yet. I am still indecisive of which ones I will use.


I am also eager to hear from my peer to review my essay and see what they think of it. I am wondering what paragraphs in my essay they feel I need to work on. I am sure one of the things that might come up is that I need to expand more on my interpretations of Neufeld. I made sure to be quite descriptive about his essay but my interpretations were short. I think expanding upon these will definitely get my point across to my readers and this will also make my statement of purpose stronger.


I should also explain more about what the emotions some of the characters display to also give a more in depth description of what the characters are going through so that my readers can feel the same as I did when I read the comic. I think that's all for now. I better go, I've got a busy week ahead of me.

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