While reading another students essay I learned something new about the Kalman essay we are interpreting. My classmates essay stated "Kalman used a picture of a pair of shoes to give the reader the feeling of the long journey she took to find the missing piece which we lost in our life, the missing piece of democracy of how to eat healthy." I found this to be interesting because the picture of the shoes and the words under the picture that said, "In my head.", always confused me but my classmates essay shined a new and different point of view.Even though the statement of the shoes that my classmate used was brief and not completely clear, it taught me that I also needed to expand on my interpretations in my essay as well. I would like to thank my classmate for not only opening my eyes to another point of view but also for helping me to learn a little bit more about myself and how I need to expand on my interpretations.
I also got the chance for another classmate to read my essay and analyse my interpretations. I found all of her criticisms to be very constructive. It really was helpful to know everything she thought I could do better.I really think she understood my purpose and helped me to get my purpose to flourish.I liked the compliment she gave me stating, "...he follows with a simple but detailed explanation." and that I was able to do this without a "copious amount of words. I appreciate all the time she took on my essay.
At my conference with my instructor for this essay, I learned that my essay draft was in free writing form. She definitely gave me some good insights on what was expected of the revised essay. Any confusion I may still have will be dependent upon how well I did with my revised essay. I am uncertain as to if my revisions are what she is looking for. I do appreciate her patience and understanding.
I think I need to work on expanding, staying more focused on the topic, and a little citation clean-up. I think if I can work really hard on these three things I should do well.
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